DiMono's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[The Special Force Part01]

Not bad

You need to work on your pacing. It's supposed to be an action movie, but everything happens very slowly in it. Comparing it to Madness, which was obviously an inspiration, you'll notice in the Madness videos everyone moves very quickly. Don't worry if your flash ends up being a little shorter, it's more important for it to be interesting than long.

Also I had some trouble with the first introduction screen not advancing until I right-clicked and pressed Forward, then right-clicked and pressed Play.

Those two points aside, the animation was smooth and the graphics were good. Keep it up, and keep improving.

[Red Ring Of Death]

Honest criticism

Here's the thing: when a submission gets blammed, it means it's not good enough to be on the site. If you want it to stay up, you need to improve it in some way. Like with the two that you put up today: I know they've each been blammed at least 3 times, and when you added music, thus (in this case) improving them, they made it past. In fact, if you check the FAQ (http://www.newgrounds.com/lit/faq/) you'll notice that submitting the same flash multiple times without improvement is whistle-blowing worthy. So there's that for you: if it gets blammed, don't just resubmit it, make it better.

As for the flash itself, I love the visual style, and I like the byte-size length, but I think it would benefit from having a slightly longer storyline which is developed on-screen. I don't mean to draw it on for several minutes, just give us a little more so we have a reason to care about the characters. The flash would also do well to have some form of dialogue, regardless of whether it's spoken, graphic text bubbles, or whatever.

I look forward to seeing what you come up with in the future as you improve.

[Z eh n]

I like it a lot

It's different without being gaudy. I'd be interested in seeing what you come up with if you extend this to a full length music video.

[LARRY episode 1]

This. Is. Awesome.

I have nothing else to say. I'll be waiting patiently but expectantly for episode 2.

[An Old Fantasy]

Constructive criticism

The main thing this is missing is head movement. All through the main fight everyone's looking straight ahead, and it looks very ...wooden? Not fluid.

Other than that, the animation is smooth and the story is solid and internally consistent. Well done.

[Pass The Ball]

Very nice

Wonderful concept, very well executed. The bonus features loop though, which is the only thing I can see that would need any improvement.

[Mcdiddys]

Love it

Just the right amount of absurdity. I laughed out loud from start to finish. Very nicely done.

[Death's Shadow part 2]

Very nice

I love the style in this flash. Absolutely love it. Looking forward to the next one.

[Race Around The World]

It's a good start

Even though they both run like spastic monkeys, what you have here is a really good start toward what would be a very good larger project. I assume you know how the video would continue if you were to finish, and it's really quite an interesting idea. I'd honestly recommend taking your time where you can, do it when you don't have anything else to do, and slowly finish it when you can. Newgrounds will be here waiting.

Yusuf responds:

thanks

btw i think they run quite crappy aswell, lol

[Rodney's at the door]

Not bad

You need to learn how to make it not loop at the end though.

RMtoons responds:

Thanks for the score! :D